Sunday, 26 March 2017

WALT mark our writing

skateboarding got canceledScreenshot 2017-03-27 at 12.07.57.pngso we played line I was 17 then miss ashley said 5 then 5 went zooming off no one won. then next round
Came miss called 3 and they were spending like the flashScreenshot 2017-03-27 at 12.19.32.png room 7 won that round next round. it was almost my turn 5 miss ashley said and we went
It was short that round and i was in it! It was fun but we won it was getting cool because it was 1/1 then the next round came they ran as fast as they can
And we won but when we said good game they punched us Screenshot 2017-03-27 at 12.27.36.png but we won


Marking my story!
Ideas
Structure and Language
Organisation
Vocabulary
Sentence Structure
Spelling
Punctuation
R3
R2
R2
R2
R3
R2
R2
Total score (add the numbers next to the R’s altogether)
16
My E-asttle score is … (click here and see what your score is)
1p

STRUCTURE AND LANGUAGE
STRUCTURE AND LANGUAGE
STRUCTURE AND LANGUAGE

STRUCTURE AND LANGUAGE

5 comments:

  1. Next steps
    -use full stops and capital letters in the right places
    - use short sentences for effect
    -use more describing words and difficult words

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  2. Hi Josh good spelling and good work

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    1. thank you leon yr the best friend ever

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    2. thanks you are the best friend ever

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