I was getting ready to go to London i was excited to go to London i wanted to go to the London bridge when we arrived at the airport i saw a metal detector.
When i walked through the metal detector the alarm didn't go off whew we did it Mum said “we are about to go on the plane”. Yay” i screamed when we got on he plane i fell asleep 1 hour passes 2 hour passes 3 hour passes we were there.
At the airport i saw out the window a Giant lifting a bride “RUN!!” a man shouted we all ran to the janitor's closet for about 5 hours the Giant disappeared “WHERE SAFE”a man screamed calmly.
Then we went back home and never came back again.
THE END.
Hi Joshua,
ReplyDeleteI really like your story, it is very interesting. I also like the way that you added lots of punctuation to your story which made it even more better. To improve you could add more detail about your character and in your sentences. Also just make sure that you have capital letters, and full stops in the right place. Other then that your story was AMAZING! Keep up the good work Joshua!
-Lydia